I really enjoyed reading my peering essays and comments it showed me what I should add to my essay. My peers said that my essay had a nice flow and a a well stated thesis. But I have a alot of editing to do with sentence structure. I plain going sentence by sentence and reading it out-loud to make sure each sentence makes sense by it self. I also plain to go back through my outline to make sure I did not miss any important points I wanted in my essay. In addition I failed to mention the video we watched in class called “What is Art For”. I wanted to add a few quotes form the video because it has many good pointing relating my topic. One of my biggest challenges in my essay will be sentence structure to make sure all my sentence make sense and have proper structure. My priority for this paper is to reread the essay my self and highlight any of the sentence that I need to focus on while thinking on where I could add a quote or two for the video that we watched in class. I also plain on adding hyperlinks to my essay and another picture. I am plaining on adding a picture of the murals in the hospital that Liv referring to in her project. I also want to add the hyperlinks to my peers projects and my own so the reader can quickly see what i am referring to in my essay.
