Ideas:
In his second paragraph he talked about how art can reach people all across the world and even from different time periods. For an idea I commented that he should add a few sentences about cave paintings and how they have lasted all these years.
Evidence:
For a comment on evidence I said “Can you explain a time this happened to you” If he included his own story or experience it would provide more evidence, and help make his argument stronger. I also commented that he should add a quote in one of his paragraphs to make his point stronger.
Organization:
For an organization comment I suggested to put his idea and what his opinion on art is in the first paragraph and not just in the concluding paragraph. If he adds his idea in the beginning of the paper we would not have to guess till the end on what his opinion of art is.
I enjoyed that we took a whole class to explain and learn how to do global edits because throughout high school we did peer edits but we were not shown how to edit a peers paper. I also enjoyed that we got to read peers papers because it allowed us to see what other student were writing about and that their take and ideas were on the subject. Global edits are more helpful than I thought in the beginning of the class because we were shown how to make little comments that were most spelling and grammar adjustments, but global edits I believe are more important because they can change your whole setup of your essay.
