Part 1: For my essay I will be including audio, visual, and spatial communication. I plan on using my own personal pictures in the essay to portray what my personal experience is with beauty. I would like to add different quotes form different artists all around the world throughout my paper as well, so I will have a spatial communication form incorporated in it. For my audio portion of my essay I will incorporate the video we watched in class called, What is Art For? because my paper will focus on how art and beauty is helpful and important for human nature.
Part 2:
Intro: Art and beauty are important for human nature because it provides escape and teaches you about humanity.
- Art keeps us hopeful and can teach us to look towards the future. I would talk about how many people in the military keep picture of there family to look towards the future of going home, and it keeps them hopeful they will return home. (pictures of the military in this paragraph). Also in this paragraph I will explain about my trip to Nicaragua and how hopeful it made me to see people from the US made a organization to help kids in a different country. (Pictures of my personal experience)
- Art connects us, it can connect us to the outside would, to other people, and people in the past. This paragraph is where I would talk about Liv’s presentation, and how the children in the hospital us art as an escape from the pain and treatments they have to endure every day. I would us this quote of Liv’s too “The kids get mesmerized by the beautiful bright colors, allowing art to distract them from the pain they are going through everyday.”
- Art helps us appreciate stuff. I would explain and give a picture of Vincent Van Gogh’s painting of oranges and the starry night. Just this painting of oranges is so simple but it is very beautiful to me because it teaches us to appreciate the little things in life. I would also explain Emme’s views and ideas about starry night and how it shows how beautiful and peaceful a night sky can be. (Quote about Vincent Van Gogh from Emme’s Ideas)
- Art is propaganda for what really matters. I would explain how society views beauty today. But then I would explain how art can demonstrate what really matters in todays world. Providing pictures of nature and talk about Hannah Little’s presentation. (quote form Hannah’s presentation)
- I would explain my idea of beauty and art in this paragraph to provide the reader. I believe true beauty comes from within the heart and it provides emotion, but it doesn’t have to be hopeful or happiness it can be sad and looking for something.
Conclusion: In my conclusion I would restate how all these different ideas connects to human nature and brings us back to peaceful times.
I saw that you mentioned that you wanted to add audio into your essay, but in the outline it didn’t show anywhere specific. You could possibly add it into the paragraph where you’re connecting art and people to the outside world. You could add clips of music possibly and and talk about how music also connects others to the world. I think that you have a really strong and great idea, I think that you have a strong outline and have really good ideas to put into your paper. I think that you have a lot of good personal explains that you briefly explained and I’m excited to read more about them in your paper.
I like your outline as you state everything you want to accomplish in your essay. This includes forms of communication and then examples of those forms as well. When you were writing your outline I like how you mentioned claim sentences in the beginning before you wrote about what you wanted to write for each paragraph. In your third paragraph your claim was, “Art helps us appreciate stuff.” I understand what your trying to get at, but I would stray away from the word “stuff” as without this word, it can make your sentence stronger. In the structure of your paragraphs, I like how you ended your last body paragraph as your own ideas of beauty. I also think the flow of your paragraphs will go together nicely. Just don’t forget to talk about the video we watched in class since you stated that in the paragraph before the outline.